Rydia

Acacia I entered the lunch room reluctantly. I hated the crowds, hated the food and most of all I hated the atmosphere. Students sat in groups; talking, laughing, being friends. ...

Keira I left my maths classroom and walked casually down to English where I had my next lesson. On the way, I passed many students, most with pets wrapped around ...

My knowledge on the subject is limited but here's a few general suggestion - The first paragraph is good though slightly repetetive and I'd change your second use of 'validated' ...

Rydia "Vegiemon!" Akira exclaimed as the five digimon advanced towards the group. The first three Vegiemon rushed forwards, charging towards Renamon who crouched down in a defensive position. "Be care

Alexia now unknown male Using the toilet proved to be easier than I had expected but even so, I was relieved to re-join the group. But then Jack started taking ...

No comment XD Well actually, there is a comment. You have some great material here but maybe it could be presented better? With a bit more variety rather than the ...

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Eeeek chat speak. I think I preferred the caps!

Hehe. One down...

Do it, Suzie. Full caps titles are against the rules!

Hahaha. Yup. But only to say a huge thank you to Nate for all his hard work. We love you Nate! xx

I can only hear a soft, sifting melody-- I do not hear the rain. It plays for long and sets me free To hear the quiet song again. [Good start, ...

Acacia The girl turned and smiled at me, as if she knew me and admittedly her face was vaguely familiar. Sam? Stacey? Something along those lines...? The boy turned around ...

Hey there! You have some pretty imagery here and though that could be added to, my main piece of advice is to work on the flow. Here's a line by ...

Keira I chuckled softly to myself as I reached the safety of the woods. There, I turned visible and began to walk at a casual pace towards the school. A ...