Rydia

Looking good so far, all. Maybe - It's set in a world of my own creation but the time period is similar to that of medieval times when people thought ...

I suppose it's time for Nettie to lose her phone then... Cornetia "Where is it?" Cornetia demanded, rummaging through her handbag. "Where's what, Nettie?" Angela asked slowly, her voice only ...

Ninja Star! You have some very pretty imagery here, dear and a good use of vocabulary. I think your rhythm could be improved in places and some of the lines ...

In a land controlled by the dark and powerful force of the Meredians, the frightened citizens wonder what has happened to the opposition, what has happened to their heroes? Have ...

This is pretty. I think some of your imagery could be stronger and the flow is a little rough in places but you have a beautiful theme. My first suggestion ...

My first impression of this is that it flows smoothly and you have a lovely theme. I would suggest that it feels more like narrative poetry than lyrical though? Because ...

*Okay, thanks for clearing that up.* Raven "It worked," Raven gasped. "But why... how?" "They can't die because they're undead, they're past the point of dead but when you heal ...

Amber "That's... very kind of you," I replied, my eyes fixed on his face as I watched his steady expression. Honesty. Sincerity. "Thank you." He nodded and leaned back against ...

I'm in.

Congratulations, well done!

Hello again, Suzie! Your second chapter is wonderful. The atmosphere you've built is perfect and the addition of Maude and Frankie is great. I feel so sorry for Frankie, poor ...

1. Sometimes if a piece is really long or filled with spelling mistakes, people will take one look and then turn away. Other times it could be due to the ...

Amber I turned away and wrapped my arms around my body, a shadowy young woman; upset and afraid. "I want to see him," I said. "I want him to see ...

Maki-Chan - I think your character needs to be from a fairytale if you're creating your own. I'll take... Name= Cornetia Blackthorn Nickname= Nettie or Nettle Age= 16 Appearance= She ...

Raven Raven swung her mace at the closest zombie, backing away, closer to the river. A loud crack sounded as the weapon impacted with the zombie's arm but the creature ...