Rydia

If I repeat mistakes that others have already indicated, I apologise - The line went all the way along the short [You appear to be missing some words here.] “Next,” ...

This is good, there's some vivid descriptions and the characters are well introduced. My main criticism is the beginning which needs more description. After reading your first part (which is ...

Hey there, welcome to the site! I'm a moderate poet and I've dabbled in lyrics once or twice. Sometimes I'm pretty good at tweaking a verse or two but I ...

Gregory "Some water... can I get you... water?" Gregory asked absently, his feet tracing a path across the carpet, wearing down the threads over and over again. His brow was ...

Love the plot, Jas. I'll choose... Name= Violet Eliza Donovan Age= 24 Birthday= 4th March Appearance= Violet is quite tall and very slim with dark blue eyes, slightly pale skin ...

Azael Azael paused and took in the girl's appearance in one deep, drawn out glance before shrugging. He bent down and took the rope in both hands, carefully pulling it ...

ltf - you shouldn't. If people are offering, they have their reasons and seriously, you're helping me out. Both shall be done before the end of today. I'm putting a ...

Thank you for the comments everyone and for the criticism Jas and Gadi. Jasmine - Thank you. I'm glad you found my poem 'nice' haha. That fourth stanza needs some ...

Hey there, Barraz, nice to meet you and welcome to the site! I'm not sure if I count as a veteran as I've been a member less than a year ...

Maybe asked another good question and I thought it best to clarify it for you all Is the setting a prison/jail type thing, or is it a whole underground world ...

I have all the purple stars, om nom nom! But now I want the blue ones. You see, I like blue and I've had the purples for far too long. ...

Audition

This was interesting. I think the concept you're working with is good and you have some reasonable characters but it could be improved. At the moment, it's a little flat. ...

Azael Azael ate slowly, savouring each mouthfull of meat and chewing it thoroughly before swallowing. He was hungry but no more so than usual. He took another bite and then ...