Rydia

Dono, should I move all the discussion threads from the main forum to the sub-forum? *I just noticed that threads in the storybook discussion sub forum don't appear to be ...

April 1: The wording is quite beautiful and I love the inclusion of the French. It's not particularly thought provoking but it's interesting and I like it. I do think ...

April 1: I do really like it, dear. The emotion is very strong and the colours are all very strong and vibrant. I think you could have brought the ribbons ...

She kept her eyes on the broad back ahead of her and [s]concentrating[/s] concentrated on putting one foot in front of the other. Abruptly the suited back [I'm not sure ...

First, I'd like to say that I disagree with the suggestion of making the mirror description in the last chapter shorter. I love the contrast that this new view point ...

I'm in love with this one, dear! It's so imaginative and beautiful. There's a gorgeous air of mystery to 'she' and I'm wondering is it perhaps a lighthouse? Or am ...

She braced herself [s]to[/s] for the pain to sear through her clothing, but was surprised when there was only a pleasant warmth. Penelope stepped forward, avoiding the weeds growing out ...

Your April 1 poem has some great imagery and emotion. I think the structure could use some work but generally I liked it. I'm not sure that 'Free' is a ...

I'm reasonably fond of my second actually. It needs some work -- majorly -- but I think it has some potential.

I think the second is amazing but I'd suggest having the writing above the bookshelf and below rather than over it so that it's easier to read. The third and ...

Penelope pulled out an envelope with the pictures and the dragon's note and handed it to Erik. [I think you need to alter this. She was holding the envelope up ...

Raven As soon as her hands touched the Aqualith, Raven felt at peace. The sound of a gentle stream hummed in her head and the surface of the stone was ...

You have some very pretty imagery here but I feel that you have some weak lines which could be cut to make it a little shorter and more dramatic. I'd ...

This is great, Leja. I agree that your beginning and end are the strongest aspect but I love the idea of an 'imploded space' though I have to agree I ...

I agree that April 1 could have been better but the idea is great and I like April 2. It would be better if you added another stanza or two, ...