Rydia

Alicia "Thanks so much," Alicia gushed as a male teenager lifted her bag down from the luggage rack. She smiled at him, took her belongings and was stepping off the ...

Hey, I'll not go through and give you specific suggestions because the general writing of this is good, what's missing is the description and characterisation. You certainly need to make ...

Angie had started talking to Henry, and others around the table were talking amongst each other. [Just a small suggestion but I think this should either be '...were talking amongst ...

I'm really behind and struggling with ideas so I've resorted to structured poem for this next which was number five until I decided to scrap four completely and will be ...

Rydia Rydia watched the trees warily as Araen'all walked deeper into the forest, twigs snapping under his hoofs. A heavy atmosphere hung about the place and as the crystal in ...

This could be lots of fun... Name= Alicia Berrit Age= 23 Appearance= Alicia has medium length, wavy blond hair and blue-green eyes. Her skin is very fair and smooth with ...

That was really great!

April 3: Okay dear, not your best poem, you're right and maybe I shouldn't meddle in your affairs but I think it has great potential. I love some of your ...

Just the one typo that hasn't been mentioned previously - I knew that authors called it people watching. It gave them insight on the people around them: the way the ...

Many will be remembered. You say nobody knows of Stalin but you do. I do. Almost everyone who studys history does. For someone to be remembered, it takes just one ...

I took a few steps back from the charging money. [As Rei said, it should be monkey not money.] I looked down at my feet sheepishly, stretched out across my ...

Excellent profile, Fan. Thanks for joining =)

Thank you for the comments everyone! I'm a little behind but here's number three and I'll post four and five tomorrow when I've fixed them up a bit: #3. Past ...

Raven Raven felt a little awkward removing her clothes in front of Izuki and Karana, even after all they had been through together. But she also knew they needed to ...

Not at all, I was just waiting to see if we'd get some more participation but I guess not so we might as well start. Rydia Rydia knew that it ...