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Cartilage connections-- directionless, disconnect-- [I love the rhythm this develops later and I'm tempted to suggest changing this line to 'disconnect, directions' but I think it changes the meaning

Alicia "No, I thought I'd go back now," Alicia joked as she nudged Megan forward so she could ride alongside Jude. "But then I'd have to give Megan back, wouldn't ...

Name: Nichola Mathews. Nickname: Nicki. Age: 29. Status: Married. Spouse: Robert Mathews, age 30. Army Personnel: Spouse. Rank: 1st Lieutenant. Deployed: Currently recovering from a high fever, Robert

Alicia "I like to keep my clothes clean," Alicia replied, a twinkle in her eye as she eyed Jude's boots in mock disgust. He laughed at her and they both ...

Great issue. The quality of the articles is wonderful and it's very well put together.

April 3: This is so beautiful, Suzie. You have some excellent phrases and the dark, rather cynical tone is just perfect. Your persona is so well defined and there's such ...

**Don't worry, TN, I'm not stealing your guy but it would be out of character for Alicia to not flirt :lol: ** Alicia "Guess I better go sign up then," ...

Raven "I don't want to lose him... I really don't!" Tears had appeared in Karana's eyes and Raven hurried to her side, rubbing her back gently. "Hush, hush, you won't ...

April 2: It's nice. I think the 'between the stars' was unoriginal and in general the language could have been stronger but for an 'I can't write' sort of poem, ...

April 2: You have brilliant imagery and I love the light-hearted, witty feel to this poem. It flows beautifully. I'm not sure about the lines 'so pretty pretty to all/ ...

April 7: Your description is beautiful. I found it a little hard to follow, how the subject matter seemed to change but the imagery surrounding the girl is lovely. It ...

April 7: At first I wasn't sure, the flow felt a little rough and I couldn't feel the emotion but towards the end, you have a very strong rhythm, the ...

April 8: slowly seeping into multifacited worlds, Should be multifaceted. I'm not sure about this one. I don't think it really had much meaning behind it, that or the meaning ...

April 3: I loved the ambiguity of whether the old man of the dock was who you was describing. It worked really well and I think you used some good ...

yeah, I'd really like to bring Warren back in. He's an interesting character. Maybe he can help them out in the next fight? there could be a sneak attack pretty ...