Rydia

A few small suggestions first - The majestic weeping willow from next door ' s garden hung over the fence, its long wispy branches swaying in the gentle breeze. One ...

A light knock snapped me [s]in[/s] to reality. Chad. ________________________ I don't think this section was quite as good as some of your others. I'm having trouble understanding Calik's character. ...

Raven "Hey..." Raven shook Izuki gently and the young girl groaned as she oppened her eyes. "It's morning," Raven said. "Looks like night to me," Izuki joked, playfully closing her ...

Awesome, that sounds like even more fun. I'll certainly flip a coin! I haven't seen the lost room but I've heard of it. Andonesia "That's nine dollars sixty, please," Andonesia ...

Billy The candle flickered as Billy dipped his quill into the ink again and scratched three more lines of small script: We had a run in with another ship today, ...

Hello there, it's lovely to meet you and there's no need to apologise, most people prefer to have their own welcome thread. What are your interests outside of writing (and ...

Not that much actually. The Crimson Tear was attacked and robbed by a new ship The Dead Man Eyes and then the same ship attacked Crashing, kid-napped Cate and fled. ...

Tom’s mother looked…washed out. It seemed as though someone had come along with an artist ' s set, erased her colour and added deep lines to her face and dark ...

She was singing to herself, some seventy’s tune that I recognised but couldn’t think of the name of. [This is just a touch awkward. Maybe '...but couldn't recall the name ...

The silver reflections of the tiny sliver of a moon reflected its light onto the water and into my face. [This is a little awkward and repetitive. I'd suggest: 'The ...

Billy Billy slipped down the mast skilfully and approached Nash who was glaring at Jake. Dratted children! "Captain," Billy paused to salute lazily. "What?" Nash snapped irritably. "It's time we ...

This is really good. I think that there's just a touch too much plain sky. I'd suggest putting a cloud there or half a cloud rather and positioning it so ...

Must be Crimson Tear if one of the members is climbing aboard.

I think the transaction between frames/ slides could be smoother - maybe if you include more if you know what I mean - but this is really cool. I love ...

I agree that the first one would look better cropped. The colour of the flower is gorgeous though! I think that you could maybe dim out the whole background so ...