Rydia

It's a lovely post but you're wrong, we do need you so find a way back from Limbo and come join us! There was a little too much conflict earlier ...

Kalli - Thank you so much! That really helps me see where the weakest sections are; I'm forever in your debt. If you want a critique in exchange or even ...

Pat Buchanan rules! And therefore, YWS rules if Pat Buchanan is voted ;)

Gregory Completely exhausted, Gregory stared at the far wall, his eyes brushing across an expensive painting but taking in no detail. At last, a young, dark haired man with a ...

Kestrel Kestrel forced a laugh and smiled. "Well yeah, sure, we all like to think that they're still with us, you know? And sometimes... sometimes it's so hard to let ...

This is cute but it's more what I'd call a domestic photo than a stylistic one. The dog is adorable and his expression is very sweet. It makes a good ...

I turned my back on my mother and whilst pretending to examine an air freshener took a peek at the woman further down the a isle. I asked shakily. Mum ...

“I wish I was around when the little one is born. I’m not even gonna get to meet the kid.” [Your tense needs changing here. I'd suggest: '"I wish I ...

*Huggles* It's very helpful, dear. I'll try and make more edits later this week. There's something about it that doesn't feel quite right... but at least I have you guys ...

Hey there, nice to meet you, welcome to the site. There's a few fan-fiction writers here, it has it's own mini forum in fact and I'm sure you'll find an ...

Hey there, welcome to the site! I'm a pretty big fan of fantasy and you have a nice list of authors there though you should really read Robert Jordan's wheel ...

Violet As one, the group walked down the street, the sound of soft foot-steps intermingled with quiet chattering. Once more, James and Fern talked - after brief introductions - while ...

Am I not alreayd your favourite person? *sulks*

Friday: it even has to die. [I think this would flow better as 'it ever has to die.'] There's something really great about this poem but at the same time, ...

Philippa Pippa found herself close to tears as the two witches chatted, seeming to not care at all that there were demons after her and her mother might be dead... ...