Rydia

Yeah, sorry about that. I'd post right this minute except that I'm practically asleep and the quality would be dreadful and sadly I'll be out quite literally all day tomorrow ...

A few brief suggestions for chapter one - ‘Clip from the extended version of the Two Towers. It’s the ent [I think you mean end?] water bit.’ I brushed this ...

SIC: Please avoid using full capitals and excessive punctuation marks. The bold is just as effective. Richard Richard smiled across at Amy and was delighted by the pale flush of ...

Whenever the writers desire them to leave, they will. My role in the storybook will remain minor so don't feel the need to ask or wait for me to move ...

Vanessa I parked the car just down the road from the club and then approached the large, welcoming club, its doors flung open to the crowd. I entered, immediately gravitating ...

Richard Richard stared at the woman he had just bumped into, mid phone call, and admired her slim, mildly tanned legs as she bent to gather her books and papers ...

Andonesia I paused dramatically, watching the hope flit across Kat's face as she glanced across at Cady shuffling her chair closer to the bed. "Tell me!" Kat begged as loudly ...

This is very well written and I see little room for improvement. However, I would like to make a few comments and suggestion: At the beginning, you talk of the ...

Hey there Tanith, welcome to the site! I'm glad you've decided to share your work with us and don't worry about being new to writing sites because YWS is the ...

Kestrel "Goodbye, Mother," I whispered sadly, my eyes lingering on the butterfly that somehow shone with an intense, black light against the abyss of my world. Eventually, she faded and ...

Dr Jamie - Sure, that sounds like a great idea! Have her bump into him any time. Richard Richard leaned closer to his blonde, skinny secretary, slipping an arm about ...

Lol. I've been a very bad member...

Philippa "Have you got a sketch pad?" Pippa asked through gritted teeth. She knew that gaining their trust was important and identifying the demon was often a high priority but ...

Kestrel Stella had a point; more hollows could be on their way, but I couldn't leave her. Time to be practical, Kestrel. Time to be brave. I rubbed my eyes ...

Andonesia Andy caressed the crucifix gently in one hand as she seated herself on the bed and then, with a small smile, she took hold of Cady's hand so that ...