Rydia

Part three: Uno: You provide a very interesting definition of what it is to be homeless but it feels so distant and so intellectual that it doesn't quite touch the ...

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This is good, though I agree that towards the end it starts to sound a little cheesy but it's sweet too and you have some lovely descriptions. My main criticism ...

Warren The morning came too soon and with a groan, Warren rolled out of his bed and hit the floor, jerked from his sleep in an instant to find himself ...

Kestrel Kes stared closely at the glowing reiatsu within the pearl and for a moment she was content to feel it flowing clockwise, swirling around its container in a smooth, ...

Was this intended as a storybook or is it the start of a piece of fiction that you've written and would like critiques on? If it's the latter then pm ...

Alyssa The soft pitter patter of rain is barely worth a mention, for when is there a day that it does not rain inside these walls? The rain is not ...

I am awaiting your letters, love! We'll all miss you so much :(

Happy Birthday, Jack! I hope you have a good day and get all the lovely presents you deserve xx

I'm going to critique this four lines at a time... As if I’m standing on a cliff top, staring at the sea below, my body quakes pathetically. [Try saying this ...

I didn't make my goal =( and I think I'll wait until after my Greece trip to set a new one.

That is awesome!

Part two: Uno: There's some really clever trains of thought in this paragraph but I think it's a little too much. There again, it depends on who your intended reader ...

Just to let you all know that I've now got two weeks of freedom so if you have any critique requests, now's a great time to send them. I have ...

Rydia "The two are leaving the castle," Rydia narrated, watching the little dots slither across her map. "They've not gone far. To a stream by the looks of it." Beside ...