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Thanks for the comments you two and Rose was a slip up. Lol. I had the name Rose stuck in my head while writing this because I was thinking Briar ...

Description is really important to me and I thought it was about time I started an article. I'll probably add to this over time and people can feel free to ...

Hey there, apparently I'm here to give you a little advice on description but before that, here's the line by line: ”Negative” [You need a full stop here.] I lifted ...

Daniel "I've spent most of my life in this hospital," Daniel said with a grin as he stirred his food around the plate. "Aren't you hungry?" Isabella asked, taking another ...

I haven't written romance before but I was inspired into writing this by the CIA's first contest. Comments and advice are greatly appreciated. Casting Shadows The air was torrid; it ...

Hey there Victer, nice to meet you! It looks like someone's changed your age to 18 for you? So no problem there =) I'm Heather and if you have any ...

Husky - Thank you, my dear. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it =) Sadie - There isn't a baby? The body at the beginning is that of his half ...

Hey there, apparently I'm here to give you a little advice on description but before that, here's the line by line: ”Negative” [You need a full stop here.] I lifted ...

I haven't read the previous critiques so forgive me if I repeat anything: Chapter 2: Dynamo and Amber arrived at a large [Comma here.] open field after leaving Horizon City. ...

You've made some good improvements. Just two minor suggestions this time: Adam sat down in the chair and we bound him to [s]the[/s] it. I stayed by his side as ...

I walked into the study and shut the door behind me. There, behind the desk, was Aidan. He was the oldest in this family, the one who gave this family ...

Chapter two We rode the bike at city speed limits. He followed the directions I gave him via the microphones that he had in the helmets. We ended up going ...

Daniel Aster "I'm not an invalid yet," Daniel replied with a laugh as he threw the covers back but he leaned lightly on the bedside table as he was standing ...

And I think I'll follow the crowd XD Roxanne Peters No plans at all. Roxanne puts her career before relationships but she does sometimes wish she'd chosen differently. Daniel Aster ...

Kestrel Kes smiled and allowed the hot tea to trickle down her throat, now grateful for Urahara's insistence that she take a break. "You and Damien should spend some time ...