Rydia

Mesa State College April 8, 2000 [I think this would be better as either April 8th, 2000 or 08/04/2000 or possibly 8th April, 2000.] Grand Junction, Colorado [Maybe put the ...

My turn! Hello there, it's nice to meet you. Snoink has done you a lovely line by line I see so I'll give you some general advice instead: 1. Rhyme ...

I've changed in quite a lot of ways, most not because of YWS but I'd like to think that the site has improved my writing skills quite a lot and ...

Hello, dear! Sorry this is taking me so long but I've finally found a lull in my schedule. I'll post you a critique every other day now until you have ...

Kestrel Getting back to our rooms was more difficult than I expected but it wouldn't do to have Damien wake up at Urahara's place. How would we explain that to ...

Use the upload feature. When posting, scroll down to where the upload section is and use the browse button to find the picture and then click upload. That way you ...

It's edited enough that I'd love you to take a second look. Admittedly it's only a paragraph or so longer but I think you'll like the changes: I look forward ...

Thank you for the comments. I've edited it a little and this is no longer going to be flash fic. I've had an idea for a plot so I'm expanding ...

Hey there, Tiff! This is an interesting poem. A little vague and the emotion could be stronger but I love the concept behind it. Let me start with a line ...

Out of Focus It's dark. The clouds hang low in the sky, painting the world like an old photograph. The sun can't break through. [Awww. What happened to his little ...

Hey there, Victor. Thought I'd drop by and be the first to critique this piece: Out of the socket the plug goes, off the chair I go. [I don't like ...

Warren They didn't understand... how could they? Warren sat alone at the head of the Quezacotl which seemed to sense his mood, flying low over the water without a twist ...

Congratulations, my dear!

Daniel; 3:00; outside patient room 147 Sydney... "I'm going to have to ask you to move," the policeman insisted as his men took up positions around the door, leveling their ...

You should really number your chapters in the title, Dynamo. It will make it easier for people to navigate them. Chapter 3: When Dynamo opened his eyes [Comma here.] he ...