Rydia

The topics of conversation are much more interesting and fitting with the Raven's character than the discussion of 'TIA' last time, though the think to drink thing was a little ...

I'm not sure that I feel justified in posting for such a short a comment as I am going to make but ah well. Again, it's smoothly transferred to third ...

The cart rattled from side to side, first over the cobblestones of Londlow’s streets, then onto the road that led out of the city [You need either 'and' here or ...

Kestrel Tension gusted away like a child's balloon caught by the wind and the group's fear deflated, desecrated by a gnarled and wrinkled man. "We are also the ones who ...

Just a few specific comments to add to those above: ‘So, do we kill it?’ ‘No. We’re going to look at it.’ ‘Druuuuuuuth. We looked at it all yesterday.’ ‘And ...

*Locked due to double posting. See here for the other post:

No, I'll get a post done in a day or two. It's not stuck on ideas this time, it's time. Sorry!

Elias Taking the human's appearance in with one long, scoping swallow, the gargoyle decided that he'd never get used to the peculiarity of eyes and hair. This one was blond ...

I thought Eamon and crew were in the galley? And it was just Deaven in the captain's room?

Lovely piece of writing, dear and I'll just answer your questions because there's nothing glaringly wrong about the main base. You've honed it to near perfection and I'm liking it ...

Maisy "Come on, what are you stopping for?" Jason demanded, a low growl emitting from his throat. Maisy recognised that as a warning, as an 'I'm going to leave you ...

Hey there! As the previous critiquer mentioned, you have a good poem here but ah, there's always room for improvement, yes? Here's a little advice and a few general comments ...

Blue, Purple and Red [Ask yourself what's interesting about this first line? Does it catch the reader's attention, spark an image or an idea, make them think? No. It's just ...

*Moved to the Lounge* But as a side note, I'm rather fond of both, however if I could only do one, I'd give. No question about that. There's something real ...

I think I'm going to lower my aim to the 100 that everyone else seems to be doing XD