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:) Ivy It wasn't a particularly pleasant plan but it didn't have to be and Eden and Brandy had been quick to agree. Ivy had seen their sharp little glances ...

Still waiting too. Don't you love the UK postal system ;)

Smithy. 9th May. 8:00 AM. Allie didn't seem to think that a stowaway was possible at first. There is a foolish novelty to her, as if she would like to ...

Just a few nit-picks first... “That’s okay, Max. No-one always believes me at first.” I found this line a little awkward. Try reading it out loud. It doesn't sound natural. ...

Smithy. 8th May. 7:00 AM. She's holding her path steady, a real beauty this ship, takes little more than a brush across the tiller and her rudder comes about. I ...

I'll do it :)

Just a couple of nit-picks for you and then I'll give some more general comments. My head's begin head begins to ache slightly now, but I know that it's a ...

Smithy. 7th May. 4:30 PM. Day one. I'm recording these adventures for one of those scurvy reporters. He'll get an edited version of course and he'll lump it for the ...

“Have you ever heard yet about the upcoming high school [Sounds very wordy and formal. It would be more natural to just say the dance and your reader would understand ...

Still looking for food...

Gee, people really like female names beginning with A huh? Name: Robert Nicholas Smith Nickname: Smithy or Bob Age: 30 Gender: Male Appearance: Well maybe he looks like this: Clicky! ...

Hey, hey! Okay let's take a look at what you have here... Well-dressed figures swirled in the ballroom, for the moment careless to the events occurring in the world outside. ...

*Moved to Homework Help*

Circa: Lorcan - Black Mages - Hotel - 6:45 "Oh they'll do much worse than that," Lorcan said with a dry chuckle. The Black Mages were a dangerous sort who ...

You're correct, Lorcan needs to go wandering. He was just waiting for his bed buddy to fall asleep so he can climb out that window XD There's more to it ...