Rydia

Hi again! Sorry this is taking so long, had a bit of a hectic week but I'll try to get you some more comments as soon as I can :) ...

Hello, my love! I really like this. Your language is powerful, your persona is well conceived and it's all put together so beautifully. I have only a few comments to ...

Hi again, dear! Sorry about the delay on this but I decided to review the second chapter for you instead of looking at chap. 1 again. You had some nice ...

Hi there! I thought I’d post my thoughts on the prologue so you have something to read through while I finish reviewing the later chapters :) First thoughts are that ...

Heya! I've found that it works really well sometimes and really badly other times. It all depends on who you're co-writing with! The first time I did this was with ...

I'm not sure about this. I like the idea behind it but I found your narrator's voice too forceful and yet at the same time trying to express both the ...

I've only done two so far but the last was pretty lengthy. I've got a poem in my queue so I think I'll do that next and then maybe another ...

Hi there! First, I have an issue with your author's note. It should not be up to the reader where the action takes place. That's important! Every aspect of the ...

Hey again :) I love the historical event you're working with here, the East-West Berlin divide is so little done and yet so interesting and very workable. I don't think ...

I'm going to aim for about four, maybe five.

Hi buddy! So I like this, you've got some really cool ideas, a pretty interesting world and a lot of intrigue. However, you've also got a lot of paragraphs choc ...

Hey there! So this is really cute and I rather love the simplicity. I'm sure whoever you wrote it for would be delighted :) I do have a few criticisms ...

Hi there! Sorry this took me a couple of days to get to but here I am :) Right! First off, I like your title. It's simple but interesting and ...

All done :)

broken jaw, broken cheek-bone. Those are quite common and would need surgery to fix, not life threatening though. Um... you can damage your kidney and spleen to the point that ...