Rydia

A very nice idea for a poem you have here and sweetly written, I'm sure your family will be very proud. I do have a few suggestions, however. I think ...

There's a very gentle, lilting tone to this which is nice and you make excellent use of half rhymes and full rhymes. However, I think your word choice could be ...

What a lovely idea! I think it will be really nice one day when you look back on this and are able to tick a few off. Maybe you should ...

As Ky says, satire is all about getting the ballance right. Start off by satiring things that are really easy to handle, such as scientific theories of which you can ...

Hi there! I actually live in England so I don't know much about how your system works but fortunate for you, I have a friend in America who's doing an ...

This poem has a really great feel to it: I love the imagery you use, the tone is beautifully contemplative and it's very well put together. I have a couple ...

Welcome to the site, Kirby! I have a feeling you'll fit in here real nicely with all us other crazy people :) Just thought I'd swing by and tell you ...

Hey Popa, welcome to YWS! And don't worry, this site is all about finding your feet and improving your writing so none of us exprect the best, we're just pleasantly ...

Hi there! Alright so you've got some nice images and word choices here but I think you need to work a little more on those nuances of poetry which build ...

Just going to bump this since it seems to be getting rather buried...

Awesome! I very much approve :D

Hello there, sleepthief! An interesting name you have there, I'd be quite intrigued to hear the origins of it, though of course you don't have to tell me if you'd ...

I've only had a quick scan through the other reviews so please forvive me if I repeat anything. With that said, I think you've got some alright lyrics here. I'm ...

Just a few more comments, looking much more finished though: 1. The top is a little too busy now. The logo's very crowded and those fonts and their vertical lines ...

I use them quite frequently / a lot. ... isn't / a forward slash? And \ a backslash? Has this whole issue arisen from my lack of knowledge of punctuation ...