Rydia

Hey again! Okay so I'm not sure if the poem at the top is inspiration for this or part of this but it was cute. I think I'll concentrate on ...

Howdy there oh team-mate of mine! I thought I'd drop by and review your lovely poem. First, a line-by-line :) He's got eyes like the sky. Yet so cold and ...

Hi there, team-mate! I am here to give you a review :) Alright so I have a few comments for you. Since I haven't read the earlier parts, I'm going ...

Hai hai, here I am as requested :) So I shall make comments as I read through and try not to be too confusing. My first point is nicely done ...

Hello there! You don't seem to have many reviews so I thought I'd come along and help you out. Let's see. I like this, something about it, though it may ...

Oh I love zombie films! My first advice, before reading this though is to organise it like a script. The name of each speaker should be aligned on the left ...

Hai Savannah, what a pretty name! I think I shall call you Savvy if you don't mind :) I'm Heather, a pleasure to meet you and welcome to the site! ...

Hello there, I shall be your reviewer today! Alright so when I read your first two lines I was a little dubious as we've all heard the cliche and you ...

Hi, here I am am promised :) Okay so my first thought is that this might have worked better in first person. Third distances the reader from the action which ...

Hi, welcome to the site! I'm Heather and I shall be your tour guide today, you shall find the welcome forum, well here and the place to post your works ...

I'm pretty awkward with intro posts too, I don't think I ever know what to say and I have a tendancy to ramble, both rather contradicting problems I suppose! Anyway, ...

Hi Stiv! Your novel idea sounds pretty cool, I like the idea of God as a warrior - I'm not religious myself but the way I see it, any leader ...

Well he flew away now! So you guys can all cheer and save the emperor and his new pet owner!

Hello my dear! Some line-by-line comments first... hush, now, here come the inklings! [This could be more dramatic just by changing your word choice up a little. Hush is a ...

Hi, just a few general tips on poetry since Demsi seems to have given you some specific comments! Old Poetry Okay so by this I mean poetry that's written in ...