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Re: Distant Voice of Saron Rinii
Hi Jon! Okay, straight to business. I liked it. You have some good ideas, and the flow isn't bad at all. Some of your rhyming seemed a little forced. If ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Housefly
Hi, I'm Grin This was fantastic! I really enjoyed it. There's a great sense of humour running through this. I especially loved the ending. My only real nitpick is if ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Hear the Doldrums
Hi, I'm Grin :) Okay. Looking at this, I'm wondering if you meant to put it into Lyrics? It sort of has a song-feel to it. But as it's here, ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: The Beach Man Blues
Hi, I'm Grin. I liked this. Of course there's still work to do, if you're a new-found poet you won't be perfect first time, but this is very good indeed. ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: A Boy Named "He"
Hi, I'm Grin. Okay, the idea behind this was excellent, and I love this thing you have that makes us think about how we refer to people. And I loved ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: maguindanao massacre
Hi, I'm Grin. This is nothing like my usual forte, and, as always, I have my nitpicks, but there were things about it that I really liked. First of all, ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Nelson Mandela: The man made of peace
Okay... I liked this. It could use some work, and your rhythm is a little hard to get into. But there's a great idea behind it, and Nelson Mandela is ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Cigarette
I really enjoyed that, in a strange sort of way, because it doesn't seem to be the sort of song that you're supposed to enjoy. I think you could be ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Tell Us The Last Thing You Said Out Loud
"Why on Earth would I be watching EastEnders???"
Jan 5, 2010 -
Re: Questions/Answers
Because the dentist is an agent of pain and suffering, obviously. Why is the sky blue? Other than the whole white light thing.
Jan 5, 2010 -
Re: Questions/Answers
Sorry to cut in, but as a Christian I'd just like to point out that I don't just believe what I read in the Bible, I live it. That might ...
Jan 4, 2010 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish 2
Granted, but now we live in Hippie World. I wish I didn't need to sleep.
Jan 4, 2010 -
Re: Corrupt a Wish 2
Granted, but you don't realise it's done already and you scald yourself. I wish the world was square.
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: You Know You're a Nerd When...
You know you're a nerd when you're asked how to spell GCSE and start to spell it out for the nutter on your left.
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: Questions/Answers
"My little brother has some." What do you say if you're in terrible pain and mustn't show it?
Jan 3, 2010
