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Hi, Jiggs! *waves* I agree with Van and Amy, epicness in its true nature. I especially liked Many were the noobs she slayed, both directly and not so (for instance, ...

Hi, I'm Grin :) This was great. I'm not sure I completely understood everything, but what I did get was fantastic. And like Amy said, the whole nonsense thing sort ...

As I would use said points in a truly unselfish way (gifts) I think it would be very reasonable for me to not need to beg, don't you? Please?

Hi, I'm Grin :) Kat and Sarah are right, this is so emotional, it's very nice indeed. My main nitpick - I don't think anyone else said it - is ...

Hi, I'm Grin, it's very nice to meet you :) Right, this was good. I liked it. A litte drawn-out, but good. Nitpickings: You shouldn't need to point out the ...

Wow, that's... pretty epic. Seriously, I thought it was excellent. Your presentation is so different and unique, and it really suits your story. You don't see this sort of thing ...

Okay, I loved this. And you have a good point. Critques can be very critical - but people are really trying to help, most of the time. I'm a really ...

Hi, I'm Grin I honestly can't think of anything to suggest you do with this. Peanut got it in one. Maybe you could try and get a little more emotion ...

Hawkie, my dear, that was stunning. You've really captured this well and I commend you. I absolutely loved it. Gold star for you! Seriously, I'm having trouble coming up with ...

Lovely imagery, well done. Right, then, it takes more time to pick out the bad points than to say what worked well, so I'm sorry about the emphasis on nitpicks, ...

Okay. First of all, well done. I liked this a lot. You have a nice story and you're going somewhere with it. I think you're being too long-winded about it. ...

Hi, I'm Grin, queen of Narrative-land :) it's very nice to meet you. I'm with Dreamer and tigress, this could use line breaks. When I first saw this, before I ...

Woah, Flem! I think that covers my main issues. I won't go into specific examples, Flem really has everything , but just to echo the briefest points, you need to ...

Hi, I'm Grin, Narrative stalker extraordinaire Your rhyming scheme is good, which is refreshing since usually rhyming seems to be a little difficult to do in narrative poetry. My main ...

Hi, I'm Grin, stalker of the Narrative Poetry forum :) Right. This is good. I liked it. But I do have my points of improvement, as always... You've got no ...