Rubric

Hey, Rubric here. First impression was that this was a great piece. You tackled some pretty heavy issues, put in a strong effort thematically and your turn of phrase can ...

I had intended to follow your instructions and "rip it apart" but I found myself warming to the piece about half way in. This is reflected by my advice becoming ...

Your not, your not, your not You're Unbeliever segued into mockery and mockery segued into her self righteousness "Unbeliever" seems to be something that is used or said, whereas mockery ...

the Fauxwind world Consistency in terminology is important. Is it Fauwind, the Fauxwind world or FauxWinds? Have one of these, but not all. Even to survive, tradition must change. More ...

The thick misty fog distracted my sight, although magic helped it get cleared, I couldn’t deny the fact that I am nervous. Ok. You've got 3 ideas in this sentence ...

I believe I'm overdue to give you another review. perspiration dripping down every inch of his body This is pretty strong, you could just go with "dripping with perspiration". warehouse.. ...

Howdy, I tried to be thorough in my review, so the fact that I've highlighted quite a bit doesn't mean your work is poor, just that I tried to go ...

This looks a bit like a synopsis, so I'm not sure if you're looking for an edit, or what kind of edit you're looking for They think there better There ...

Hey, back again! Hopefully this review won't drag on too long, but I do tend to get caught up in the flow of it. the Speaker Is this the only ...

Hey. Couldn't spot anything that needed fixing in terms of spelling and such, so I've gon ewith a very subjective "this is how I would edit it if I was ...

and its alarm was just an annoyance What does this mean? Is the alarm not loud enough, does he have no reasone to wake up? please be clearer. They lived ...

Hey Jai, Haven't seen you around the site in ages, but then I haven't been overly active either. Hope you don't mind but I did a quick skim of the ...

little sister told me jumping up and down making me open my birthday present. little sister told me , jumping up and down to make me open my birthday present. ...

half-elves have ’em too Colby seems so well spoken (apart from the obvious stutter) up until this point! I had in my mind that he was refined in his speech ...

‘’mnot. I’ve been good. I have been good, haven’t I, Master?’ ‘Yes, you’ve been good.’ Grudgingly, happily, wearily....good chance to define Quennel's character again. I like the way y