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Sixty riders were bogged down by the horde surrounding them, unable to break free. As the ring of troops encircling them grew tighter, one horse reared, tossing its rider. Before ...

Sable: Hitchen The sound of aluminium coated tin cans striking the hard floor of the supermarket breached the background pop filtering in off the radio station. Sable looked up from ...

Very well written, I’m not even sure if this was an error, but it read strangely in my head: “everyone around and Esmee daintily” everyone around them, and Esmee daintily ...

You can kill characters in such a way that they are still important to the novel/ still affect the actions of other characters. Heroic sacrifices aside, the deaths of characters ...

Sable: Hitchen "You've missed one you know." Sable ignored the voice. The doctor had told him that Janus couldn't know anything he didn't, so the voice was obviously misleading him. ...

“pondering aimlessly” You can’t really ponder aimlessly. “calm and simple paradise to perch like a cat” Calm and simple paradise; to perch like a cat “Moment of paradise over.” I ...

I've already created a characer. I'll create a company person if I'm allowed to.

Name: Sable Smith Age: 22 Gender: Male Location: Hitchen (a small town not too far from London) Appearance: 6’ 3”. African. Scar on the left side of his neck from ...

Honestly, or wishful thinking? Because if you ask that kind of question the answer will generally be whatever animal the person thinks is the coolest. Personally, I'm a polar bear

Hmm, i think vampire stories are great, but I think if an author uses them, they really need to have their own slant on them. Having said that, vampires are ...

Hey guys, add another one to the list! I'm from adelaide

"Where are you headed to?” Where are you headed? "implying that it was too quiet around the table between the menfolk" although she is doing this, "trying to liven up ...

The cavalry formation thundered through the infantry before them like a scythe through wheat. Garbed in matched sapphire uniforms, wielding swords of the same make, and riding horses of near-identical

there is no stereotyping for geniuses, as explained above. However, many of the smartest people you hear about, or meet, are also affected by various mental conditions. Autism and savants ...

You've got a fair few punctuation errors here, a few spelling ones too, but overall the piece is constructed well enough. "think Thieves and Murderous psycho’s are scary " you ...