RubinLikes2Write

Hahahaha nice plot twist at the end!! In the begging try to speed thing up just a little. And I'm serious just a tiny bit. Otherwise I liked it the ...

Oh my god i love you. I told my friend (TrinLovesU is her YWS screen name) that i talk to my characters and she asked if I was on drugs!

Heya, good work! Very intriguing! Will there be more? I hope so! Your very talented. Sorry about the choppy sentences, ha-ha I'm tired. But one thing you could put in ...

Hey! I'm Robin (ignore my screen name) and I'm reviewing you! Oh ya, really since I suck at spelling I'm not pointing stuff out like that, just plot. OK well, ...

heya heya heyy!! SO! I'm starting to get the feel of things. I was if-y with chapter one, but now you have me intrigued. I love how the sky is ...

Heya! OK I noticed some typos but nothing that the people who revised you before me didn't cover. :) So, I agree that the mother thing was pretty confusing. But ...

OK it's not fantasy AT ALL in the beginning. So please don't leave comments saying that it isn't fiction. I will even PM you the outline. Thanks for reading! :) ...

awww cute! hey guess what? MY THUMB STILL HURTS FROM STUPID HOLY SPIRT THAT WE PLAYED LIKE THREE HOURS AGO!!!

heya! Its me! Well i can tell DreamWalker and Pippiedooda went over most of the grammar... wow they're really good at that! Okay Well at the very first part I ...

hahaha i love this! its sort of pointless and random but that's what i like about it! I just have one little bitty suggestion. Put more detail into what's going ...

ok first of all, Jesus Christ DreamWalker!!!!! WOW!! Ok, on to the review! The only two problems I had with the story is when you described Nick is that you ...

wow! That was....uh.....well, that was disturbing! In a good way of course! :) but ya, wow very interesting how it was in second person. It seemed like it was a ...

I really liked it!! The only thing is when the story was from Natalia's point of view you could give some more detail. All the other characters i got the ...

ow my head.... The first sentence was so filled with big words that it was hard to grasp what you were trying to convey. And no offense but TOTAL abuse ...

teehee!! As an open Twilight hater I enjoyed this. A lot. Completely not a waste of time!! I loved it!! Haha i can totally picture Edward dancing in circles because ...