Royboy

Oh, yes please post one chapter at a time. And double space your paragraphs. THEN you'll get actual critiques.

It’s white and beige paint was beginning to chip , and the giant red cross was chipping . There were white blinds in all of the windows, most were closed, ...

Very girly. Very VERY girly. Around seven or eight. She can't think of anything but wearing pink and playing with her dolls. She's still innocent in every way. Willow

And I think you spoke to soon. *sigh*

7/10 interesting. Very intersting.

haha I have to see that now. *runs off to google moon*

I think the world has gone insane. Google is the answer to life, the universe and everything for me. Apparently, Google feels differently. Go into google and type the phrase: ...

“No , Jamie,” her mom pulled her hand back. Add in that comma for direct adress. Basically, I couldn't really find anything that ShadowTwit hadn't already gotten. I read that ...

Oops, my bad. This was about double what it is now, but then I realized that the entire beginning was a load of crap. XD So there's a bit I ...

Stirly, I'm so sorry. I probably should have thought of that, and I'm thoroughly embarrassed that I didn't. I hope I didn't offend you in any way. Also, If you ...

10/10 Do I have to explain? It's just that great.

I'm confused. It's just a conversation between a girl and some bubble fairies, which isn't bad, but it neds some description. Also, I don't have a name for the main ...

I have my own way of coping. Notice the sig... Plus the fact that after a while, you learn to live without searches and portfolios. You learn links in certain ...

I've been around the world and discovered only stupid people are breeding.