RoxanneR

Yep, I'll join the sad-people-sitting-around-and-watching-film-credits-to-find-surnames-for-my-characters club! RR*

This is a bit confusing, what with the overload on description and the mix-up of the tenses, and so many characters all introduced in the first piece of text! Oh ...

Kool site. I might get the book myself. It seems good. RR*

I have tried it and it sometimes makes you feel a bit stupid, sitting in your room and blowing bubbles and talking to yourself...Although my mom does go a bit ...

No offence, but I think this is a complete copy of Harry Potter. The whole 'Finding out I'm a wizard/witch' thing is a bit dated now that J.K. Rowling has ...

I went to a creative writing workshop the other day with the author Beth Webb, and I asked her how she goes about preventing Writer's Block. She said that the ...

Yeh, your mind lets in more ideas when you're not thinking about them than it does when you are struggling to think! RR*

Yeh, some of the spelling is a bit off, and it would help a bit if you capitalised the first letter of each sentence. Also, is you have to explain ...

Yeh, I'll give it a go. Anyway, how hard can it be...? RR*

Yes, If you don't call some of the kids by their name, and just say 'said one girl' it would make more sense. Appart from that, I liked it. There ...

I don't like to talk to people about what I think, so I write it instead. I find my notebook somewhere I can go when everything gets too much for ...

I did a quick whip around my room, and the total comes to over 250. And that's only in my room. There are some little kiddies books that I have ...

Sorry, but your grammer is a bit ...strange... and the font size and colour are a bit in your face (although there may be a reason why you uses such ...

There needs to be more paragraph-definition in this story, and although you have tried to put some of the words onto new lines, it's still a bit confusing. Try double-spacing ...

Yeh, I agree with everyone. There are a few grammer errors, and some of the text is more passive that I think you want it to be. But with a ...