RoxanneR

Yeh, this sums up most of life, and it's easy to read. Was there a special occasion as to the meaning of the text, or was it just a piece ...

It's a touching subject, and it reads and sounds a whole lot better with the paragraphs, as I just skipped over the best bits in the first edit. Was the ...

Rosethorn, Jiggity and Myth seem to have summed it all up pretty well. There is lots of great discription in this piece, and you can imagine the setting well. RR*

Nice work, even though it should be in a poetry forum. Just a couple of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes: The way I look. My back so bare feathery wings ...

That is a good piece of work, although double-spacing on paragraphs would make it a whole lot easier to read. You have missed out some of the commas, but I ...

It doesn't really matter if you rush the beginning because you want to write the rest of the story, as long as you go back and edit it. A story ...

This is a scary and disturbing story, although it is written well! There is not much description in it, but we can picture what is going on. It's interesting, if ...

This isn't bad, although the length of the first sentence was a bit disturbing! Try breaking it down into two sentences for lighter reading. "Yea honey i'll be home in ...

I think Myth pretty much said it all. It sounds a developed piece of writing, but you do need to work on your spelling and grammar. Keep going! RR*

This isn't bad, but some of the grammer is a bit strange, and it is all squashed together. Try double-spacing your paragraphs, starting any new speaker's dialogue on a new ...

Granted, but now you're stick thin and you slip through the gaps in the floorboards. I wish people would come to my Christmas party

That's a very long list, and very helpful! But I seem to have a curse on me that I have to add a 'said' word in a sentence. Anyone else? ...

The Memoirs of a Geisha soundtrack is the best for writing, I think? Does anyone else find that relaxing? RR*

Yeh, that's a good idea... Do you know where I could find a script on the internet? RR*

~ Looking up at the sky... ~ In the musty books littering my attic... ~ In every Disney movie I've ever seen... ~ In the smell of my newly-bought perfume... ...