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Thanks for that, Sureal. Yeh, we don't want to give too much away, considering it is just the prologue, but if you think it needs more description... RR*

Yes, this is just the first chapter, and I wanted to see if there is any way that I could change it for the better, and make it more appealing. ...

No, I didn't either, but with a few more adjustments you could get that feeling just right. RR*

Fantasy Of You, all I want to do is see how much I have improved writing, from three years ago untill now. And I don't waste people's time, as I ...

Yes, it's a bit confusing, but with a little bit of editing and some re-aranging, it could be really good! RR*

There is hardly anything there to base any constructive criticism on, but if you add more to the plot and characters, you could get a lot more help. RR*

It's good, but there's not much to go on. You can get a real picture of where the character is and everything around them. Is it the beginning of a ...

This is a bit heavy going, as there are no double-spaced paragraphs, so it just looks like one big blob of words. Try editing it a bit. RR*

Some of the description is good, but some more would be good. RR*

This sounds good, but it's slightly confusing! All the different names! But I love the name Cloud, and I think this story could work a lot better if you could ...

I'm looking for the same thing. Anyone know anywhere? RR*

To put some more gore in the story! I like to kill off the characters that remind me of my worst enemies! That always makes me feel better! RR*

And me. My computer is so old it practically crashes on me every 5 seconds! RR*

Wow! The word count for nove site was way confusing, but I got there in the end! I never knew it was so different! I will never trust my computer's ...

Thanks for all the help! The night I read it, I sat on my laptop and set myself a target of 1,500 words in about 2hours. Usually I need to ...