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Granted. But now you want to work all the time, never get to see any of your friends and become a complete and utter loner. I wish I could finish ...

I'll probably be completely wroung but I'll have a go. It sound like teenage fiction about young girls, kinda, getting over their worries and problems together. Scarlett

Granted. But you have to get up at 4am every other day. I wish I had a nice bikini for the summer... RR*

Ooooh! *Rips #10 from Little Tin Fish's mouth and stuffs in pocket* Mine now! I finally have a new insentive to write another story. I've been blank for months. RR*

Sometimes, a poem's rhyme seems forced, but most of the time it worked really well in this poem. It didn't have to rhyme, but it sounded good so I wouldn't ...

Granted. But now your house is so silent that you end up going mad. I wish I have the best birthday party ever... RR*

Granted. But pink-hippo-with-purple-wing's meat is selling like hot cakes now, so you are hunted, killed and eaten. I wish I had more clothes, in my size, that fit me... RR*

And the only words he spoke were, Don't wait up for me tonight. Should this be: And the only words he spoke were, 'Don't wait up for me tonight.' This ...

It's the only thing talked about in the Lit magazines. It's the only thing on the news. But how do you think Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows should end? ...

Granted. But now you can't go to sleep. Ever. I wish I didn't have to watch the Queen's Speech on Christmas Day...

The start of the story didn't really make me want to read more of it. The characters didn't really have personalities and the dialogue had severe problems. It's just a ...

Yeh, I agree with what Don Quixote said. Also, if you spaced the text out a bit, it would be easier to read and therefore less boring. No one wants ...

Yeh, the 'sky' and 'fly' connection was nice, but, as everyone else said, does 'Clouds' have to be capitalised? All the best, RR*

The Night ot remember is the night where you feel you can do anything you could possibly dream of doing. Do you mean: The Night to remember? Is there any ...

“Tell me who? I need a name!” This question mark could be changed to an exclamation mark. This is a really nice poem. I's unerving, but it tells a story ...