RowanHowler

hello, "I graduated from homeschool last year as valedictorian of my class (and worst student as well, incidentally)". - LOL! In this as well as your novel, you have a ...

Hello, I think "brown-eyes" is an unlikely thing to be called out of hand, unless it is a regular nickname. Eyes that are brown don't usually draw much attention, unless ...

Brigitte vanished into the darkness of the forest. "Brigitte! Please!" Reinhard called from the upper story of the castle. He smacked the flat of his hand against the stone wall. ...

As soon as I read the first paragraph I was hooked and I believe it is because you characterized the boy without even mentioning his name or using dialogue. The ...

Hello, I would say this is not long enough or detailed enough to catch my interest. From an intro I usually expect about a chapter or at least a page. ...