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Very well done. I do think that there could be more line breaks like this: Imagine you and I Go back in time To see life Through a child's eyes ...

The structure there was pretty fantastic and I liked how you set it up. You managed your line breaks pretty darn good in this one because the rthym flows nicely--not ...

That totally rocked my socks off. This was one of the most fantastic pieces of poetry I've seen written by ANYONE (probably because I'm a dreamer too ;)) and I ...

Wow! It gave me chills. But I think there was the TEENIEST grammar mistakes at the end. "Breathe d as one. Die d as one." I think if there was ...

I like the simplicity (I HATE HATE HATE a LOT of elaboration) and how you got the meaning across using a metaphor. I just plain like it :)

Wow, Flame11! I was surprised to get your review. It is kind of about predjuice and racism and all that, but mostly it's about money classes (upper, middle, lower) and ...

It was okay, but I do think that you could have used more condencesing language and more imagery--examples of what you are talking about.

Oh my gosh! This almost made me cry...and I'm a guy. I loved the subject. I could imagine the music (heavy on acoustic guitar, a light drum background) and I ...

I agree with Life Is Sexually Transmitted. You should just keep it out. Otherwise, not bad for a start. This beginning has been a bit overused, but still...good

Oh my God! All these pictures are SO beautiful. I like Golden Grains (because the waves look very surreal) and Breathtaking... (without the boy in it, it would have been ...

Wow! I loved this poem. I loved how you displayed the imagery SO SO well! It is perfect. :)

I do think it is a bit drawn out. I think if it was shorter, it would have a bit more impact. I like the prose and the subject--although reading ...

I agree with some of the was a bit dull. I think that you need to sail us through to when it happens and maybe have a better hook to ...

Oh, oh yeah... [Intro Verse] Feeling the life charging around me Taking every little thing in Watching the river flow and go on [Verse 1] Feel the lava underneath With ...

This is a fantastic story. I loved the plot, the thoughts of was just plain good.