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Okay, basically EVERYONE here has covered the grammar and spelling and all that stuff, so I'll just take care of the rest. I love the simplicity of the poem, but ...

Lovely poem, short and adorable!

This is good. I just have a couple of things to say: 1. Her golden curls retracted as her shady figure droppled nearly dead onto the loveseat. I think it ...

Pretty cool but the last paragraph is LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONG! break that up...polish it and you're good

This is good, but elaborate on the boy. Why is she staring at him so much? Is Carver English because he used Brit slang and if not then take "batty" ...

I read it again as you asked and I have to admit, now it seems a bit cliche. "A voice like a walk..." "I'm your normal teen girl." Those are ...

This was really good. I could actually be involved. Very good.

(Author’s Note: Hello. This might seem a bit random but it’ll make sense later on as I keep writing, okay? Sorry to keep you all waiting so long.) Sherman, Texas ...

Very good. I liked how you showed the character. Good writing too!

Okay, there is SERIOUS punctuation needed. You need to go over it with a wrong-grammar detector! It's pretty good, but the lack of grammar and spelling threw me off. Polish ...

Pretty good!

Very, very good. I liked all the characters. However I think sometimes you need to do this: SARAH: (hesitates and blah blah blah) That will make it more clear to ...

VERY GOOD! Everyone's covered what I said. Just show more, not tell.

This was very well-written. The descriptions are so clear I feel like I'm here with the character. "My hair stuck to my face like plaster tangling in front of my ...

Whahahaaaaa! Some of the pictures were HILIAROUS! I loved it! Great job!