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I agree with Summerless. The way you can make it longer is to show, not tell. Have the reader experience the burning cheeks of a blush or the irritation when ...

Although this does sound like abuse in a way, it's mostly because of your word choice in the second verse. "You want to make me scream with pain." Find a ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! Second of all, I agree with OverEasy about the 2 reviews=1 post thing. Thirdly, I love how you presented this poem. It's the first ...

Okay, I didn't read the other stuff (which I should probably have done) but this was very good. Typos were scant and so were spelling errors. I loved your use ...

Fantastic piece of poetry. I loved your use of poetic elements and the reptetion. There is really nothing that the others haven't covered. All in all, I just loved it. ...

This is a very engaging story. However, your paragraph structure turned me off. My personal preference--and some others on here--like it like this: Paragraph Paragraph Paragraph This is a very, ...

Very good. The pacing was excellent. I loved your use of italics and normal font states. I don't really need anything to critique. The rest has covered it. But I ...

This is a very, very disturbing storyline. I think that you should tone down the explicitness a little bit, because I almost wanted to gag as I read it. (Sorry ...

Very good! I loved it! The only problem is that it didn't really make sense. But if that was your goal, then it may turn the reader off rather than ...

Type it. And get the scenes that you want to write most out of your head, then the ones that are most vivid and then the rest is up to ...

The Everything Book On Writing A Novel. My parents got it for me for Christmas and it has literally--no pun intended--everything!

I don't have much aim in a direct audience, but if you want to write what you read most, then keep your general likes/dislikes in mind.

Yes! Sometimes people have blogged the chapters of their books and THEN got published!

Sadly, I agree with King. You did break the rules of the site. The basic needs for story posting are 2 reviews=1 post. Story-wise, this piece is an excellent creative ...

I think that it should be based entirely on personal choice as so many people have said. However, if you don't want a baby and you desperately want sex, then ...