Ross

I'm not a big fan of fantasy, but this was very good. You did make the MC a bit flat. Bring life into him. And describe the setting more. That's ...

It’d been a normal morning for Liz Landry. Up till Officer Zachary Caine had knocked on her door and asked if her son was home. “Jack? No, I don’t imagine ...

TITLE: Okay, the title was a bit...overused and old. :( It didn't really interest me to start reading your story. BEGINNING/CHARACTERS: You shouldn't really begin with a description of the ...

The first thing I noticed when reading this story was the information dump. You give up too much information and too much in a telling manner. You're in a person's ...

This would actually fit more in Poetry. The rhyme is perfect for Poetry, but there's no chorus, no bridge, no structure whatsoever. The title certainly caught my attention, seeing as ...

SEX OR LOVE: Well, the problem is that some people make their characters sex objects. Bond Girl wannabes. ;) And then other writers aim for the mushy sighing and googly ...

I would love to see a perfect set of real, fleshed-out characters. Characters CARRY the story. They are the ones who make the decisions, decide to push that red button, ...

I JUST SAW A FACE When the moonlight shone And the dreams floated around Someone was singing And I was falling in love When I saw your eyes Everything in ...

Are you watching me tonight? Can you feel the pain in me? I lie with my cheek against ice As tears drip on the linoleum Stay with me, I’m begging ...

LORELEI As Lorelei sang the song I remember my own dreams Darkness was in decay Rapture spun me around And I laughed at myself How we can be fools Time ...

I am! And I have no school! TPBM loves his/her iPod.

Angel, that's amazing. Sounds really cool. I'm outlining a novel called We Are The Outsiders . It's inspired by three things: Rent (the movie), To Kill a Mockingbird (the book) ...

1. To Kill A Mockingbird 2. Charlotte's Web 3. New Moon 4. The Da Vinci Code.

1. The soundtrack of my current story. That way, the music will be a writing lifeline. (Can be anything from heavy metal to classical) 2. Confortable clothes. I have to ...

I'm guessing you're a blond with blue eyes? :D Your avatar can reflect your true looks, so...