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I did some editing. Actually a lot of editing. If you get a chance to re-read let me know! I'll (hopefully) be posting the next chapter soon and I have ...

Ginger James- The way he kissed her forehead made me lurch with jealousy. That movement, simple and non-intimate, used to be a regular one for Jaques and I. Even though ...

Roman- After lunch the car came back to pick me up from the studio. Everything was so rushed and hectic, not at all the way I liked it. I gave ...

Ginger James- Roman had been gone when I got home the night before and in a meeting with Marni for the past two hours. I sat outside the conference room ...

I loved this! That second comma in the sixth line did throw me off and I think you could omit it, but besides that I didn't see any typo's or ...

Um, this cracked me up. I'm seriously in love with this poem. To me the flow was good and the humor worked. I wish you would rap this and make ...

Roman- Ginger paced in the living room. She looked stunning in the red dress and heels Marni had picked for her. Her hair was swept up into an elegant bun, ...

I loved you Ginger. I still do. I loved you Ginger. I still do. I loved you Ginger. I still do. The words ran through my head over and over ...

Ginger James- I reluctantly sat next to Jaques with Michael. He went on about time constraints on the film. A year seemed like too long. I didn't want to be ...

Ginger James- It seemed a little soon to be going on set but we were going nontheless. I watched Marni and Roman talk in low tones about me, Darren, and ...

Ginger James- "Get up," Roman said. I could hear his tone, and it wasn't happy. I sat up, blinking at the harsh sunlight pouring through the open window. Roman tossed ...

First reviewer! Woot. So I tried to read your Prologue and it was too much for me. I couldn't stay interested at all and it basically, like the reviews said, ...

So you got a pretty in depth grammar review and I'm awful at grammar so I'll just stick with other stuff. Sound good? First, I like your Carson character. I ...

I really loved that. I wish you would write more because I think you could make a whole sort of story out of it. I think the main character, Marque, ...

Being Dead is for Losers, Chapter Three Danielle- Samantha was on the ground, covered in dirt and sweat, her eyes bulging. I climbed out of the hole brushing off my ...