Roe

Princess Consuella Bananahammock! XD C*** Bag. Please don't use obscene language outside the literary forums. -Grif.

Ooh, this was definitely really good! I thought it was going be a bit Twilight-like at the beginning, but I love how there was a twist. Please write more! Roe

Part One Iris L.T. Anthony I strummed a chord on my guitar into the dimly lit room. Opening my eyes, I saw the fog from the gleaming lights above me. ...

I like this! Sometimes when I read a short story it can be quite slow, but this kept my attention through the whole thing. I only spotted a few mistakes ...

You have multiple grammar mistakes and, like Collision pointed out, you need to work on your tenses. There's also one or two run-on sentences, but those can be easily fixed. ...

Hey there, Roe here to review! "We never smoked. That's just Dad's cigar's, not me." You don't need an apostrophe in cigars Soon, he began to buy packs of Camels ...

Starting the story is always the most difficult part for me. After that it's alright, but sometimes I'll just pound my head on the keyboard (not literally) because I have ...

The girl takes steps very slowly and looks all around her. She knows she isn't safe here. Her scars are there to prove it. "This is a savage planet." she ...

Wow, this was amazing. You have a real talent for writing, so definitely use that to your advantage. I couldn't find anything wrong with this piece! I read it a ...

Hey there! My comments will be in red today :) He put his hear I think you mean head in-between his knees and she sat down beside him. “It’s Lily,” ...

Q: What's your full name and what is its meaning? Elina Lillian White. I have no idea what it means; my mom only chose it because it sounded nice. Q: ...

Hello! I was searching for a good writing community to join with people my age, and I stumbled across this fine place! Well, I've been writing for a while now, ...