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Wow, very powerful and very emotional. Just by reading the first paragraph I can see you have a knack for writing. I don't think there are any grammar mistakes. None ...

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Looks really good. So long as it serves the purpose it was designed for, its good. The only thing I am curious about is the top and bottom, as they ...

Chapter Two – A Serpent’s Tale Two Years Later – England – August 1st, 1458 Over the years little occurred in Dax’s life. He lived an unchanged routine. Every day ...

That was great. It quickly drew the reader in giving them reason to feel for the narrator. It has great mystery, and I really want to know what else is ...

I have a playlist set for writing, and one for editing. I try to make the editing music more lighthearted because it keeps me alert. I also find like so ...

These look fantastic. You managed to capture a lot of emotion in just a few pictures. I really want to see the unedited photos, just because the filter is strong. ...

My first thought when reading this..... "Whoa! What is happening here?" I was sort of confused in the beginning and I have a question? When you write do you picture ...

My first thought when reading this..... "Whoa! What is happening here?" I was sort of confused in the beginning and I have a question? When you write do you picture ...

Hi. This is a rewrite of the first novel that I ever wrote. I wrote the original back when I was 10 or 11, and is was pretty bad. But ...

This post is in response to you needing an antagonist. First off you don't really need an antagonist per-say. You need a conflict that has your protagonist pitted against something ...

I'm really confused after reading this. Is the character Poseidon related to god in any other way than the name? I looked like you were trying to make him the ...

I'm very curious as to how this ties into your Novella. This was artfully written, and was great. It was very eerie and left me wondering what was going on ...

Okay so I updated the first post with the rest of what could be called Chapter One. Thanks for all the positive feedback.

What an interesting concept. I loved it. The narrator has a strong voice and very strong characteristics that shone threw in your writing. The first bit of dialogue was a ...