RoachRedford!

okay, i'm not big on critique-ing but i'll give it my best shot. red font is my observations/corrections/suggestions Finally, the volcanic planet came into view. “There she is, Ted.” I ...

and of course, thanks Vincent.

thanks heaps for that, will take note and do some more reasearch! :)

EDIT - hey guys, decided now that exams are over i'll progressively upload what i've written, its bloody long so here's just the prolouge + first section. enjoy! The boat ...