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Hey there guys, this is the first time I've really dedicated a large portion of the preparation for writing to plot development. There isn't any action in this "scene" (I ...

Hey there TheThing . I'm your friendly neighbourhood reviewer for today. I'm going to post my general comments in blue at the end, my grammatical comments in red throughout the ...

Hey there :) When writing an article, it's always important to ensure you don't assume the reader knows too much about the subject. For instance, I don't know what self-immolated ...

After a huge drought from writing I've finally returned to YWS. Not many people know me on here, but I can't believe how much the activity on this site has ...

So this is chapter two, for those who said the first post wasn't quite enough to critique on. I hope you like it :) ———— Salvos, Loki Ice Ridge, 2533 ...

Hey guys, this is my latest work and I'd love some feedback on it. This isn't much, and it will be mainly action oriented but I didn't want to dump ...

This is really disjointed and incoherent, and I had trouble understand exactly what was happening. This is mainly because of the way you didn't explain much and swapped tenses quite ...

I like the idea's you present in this, but it's just too vague to give a critique on. Please PM me if you write more because it is certainly intriguing. ...

Hey there Aspiring! I'm going to review this for two reasons; A) I love zombie fiction and anything Zed Head related. You should read World War Z and The Zombie ...

Project Kratos *EDITED* First off, I'm sorry for the formatting, I have no idea why it will not let me keep my indentations, centered and bold text or whatever. Secondly, ...

Thankyou so much everyone for this. As of now, I have made these changes and will re-upload very soon; - Switched from 1st person to 3rd person - re-edited some ...

Hey there guys. I haven't submitted anything for a while and this is something I just whipped up tonight. Wanted to know what you guys thought. I like it so ...

It has been ages since I critiqued anything, so here goes. RED will be my corrections/suggestions Monday, November 27th, 2006 09:00 Hours Trans-Alaska Pipeline, Remote Alaska There’s this huge pipel

He hit the wall at half pace, not quite enough speed to get himself all the way over. He’d done this last time and Ben Cain cursed himself for not ...

I have to see, I'm not a massive fan of Glee, but that was great. You portrayed Kirk really well and I can see your writing going places! I was ...