Riveneye

Thanks for all of the help so far. I actually didn't write this story a friend of mine did. He had me put it up on here and is having ...

Not much I can comment on for this one. I formatted it out so there shouldn't be too much wrong with it. The Savior with a Black Wing The sun ...

Yes your right this could defintely have more imagery and the scenes as I noticed now are very rushed. Guess that'll be my first thing to work on. I was ...

I've already finished the manuscript I'm just in the rewriting stage so critque is very helpful write now. I'm putting up the prologue now and I'll see if I can ...

Hey Adim First off welcome back. I hope you can manage to at least hone your skills back to normal. So you can come up with some good yarns for ...

Hey Sarah It's great to have you with us. So your majoring in English. That's cool hopefully you'll enlighten the rest of us with your knowledged. Yay a christian and ...

I didn't mean that I wasn't worried about the paragraphs themselves. I just meant when I ready to publish this I won't worry. As for the on here I'll just ...

I loved this story. The detail was good, there wasn't many grammatical errors that haven't been mentioned. And like cherry said you need to be very careful of repetivness unless ...

Welcome to YWS Cherry. I think you condition is interesting but it must be a pain to have. Bet you'll come up with some real horror stories. I have something ...

Hey great to see another new writer. I joined about two hours before you. Don't worry about being short half my friends are short and most of them don't care. ...

Yep I saw your post. I understand what your saying with the words was or were. I've read several books on writing. All of them tell you to avoid repetitive ...

Yeah I know. I have it formatted just fine in MS Word. So I'm not really worried about the paragraphs.

Edit: 6/19/2010 I've added a revised copy. Also you can read it via it's place in my novel. The Wall of Ignorance I stared at the wall for the millionth ...

Thanks a lot I'm definitely going to take what you said into consideration. I wanted to make sure it wasn't to messed up before I cross it off the list. ...

Well here's my first story. I wish I could have formatted it better. But it was hard for me to do that with this forum. Enjoy :D Edit: 5/18/2010 I've ...