Riveneye

Thanks a bunch was quite helpful especially to point out all of the commas. ;)

It's okay I just need them finished by the end of the week if thats okay with you.

Can you review these two for me. They're both fantasy and going into a novel with a bunch of other short stories. Thanks

Okay I've got a couple of short stories for you to review. They're both fantasy and going into a novel with a bunch of other short stories. Thanks

First off welcome Nick. Glad to see you followed my advice and joined. If you need any help you know where I live. Anyway about your poem. I really love ...

Well here's the fifth story in that collection of short stories. I'm more excited as I get closer to finishing editing all of the stories. So I thank everyone for ...

Okay here's Story number four in the collection of short stories I'm working on. I've formatted it right this time. And unlike the previous stories I'm positve I've only posted ...

Okay I have edited and added a totall fresh revised copy of this story. You can also read it here via it's place in a novel of mine.

Okay I've added a fresh revisied copy and I'm in the process of taking out the copy of this I had posted in the regular fantasy short stories.

Hey Emmy Here's my review for you. My comments are underneath the paragraph words with errors are in red. Some might say he was handsome, gorgeous even, but when his ...

Hmm, I see what your getting at. So it looks like the beginning is what needs more work. Yes this boy was basically supposed to be Jesus/God in disguise.

Here's the third story in the collection of stories I'm making. Edit: 6/19/2010 Added a new revised copy. The Wall of Ignorance I stared at the wall for the millionth ...

Here's the second story in my collection of short stories that I'm putting together. Darkness to Darkness Long ago when the world was still young, there was no light and ...

Thanks like I said before I think I'll put up a edited copy later today. I'm not going to keep it totally to myself. The same friend that wrote it ...

There's some stuff wrong with this one. I'm in the process of editing it. I just didn't have time to put together a revised copy on here. The Savior with ...