Ringo_rules987

Rhymes got a bit forced in parts but rhythmically it was spot on. But I'll get away from the technical aspects. Emotionally it's like a knife, it cuts deep. The ...

A Failed Mother She gave birth to her beautiful boy, Loved him with all of her heart. Whispered loving, mild words When he wailed at night. Time went on and ...

The use of onomatopoeia in this piece was nice. It helped bring out the drama and made it interesting to read. As the other posters have said, your Alice in ...

I actually really enjoyed reading that. Your rhymes were subtle and helped pull the poem together in a way instead of hindering the message of the poem. Going along the ...

Please Me Sing a tune for my hungry ears. Murder me with the sound. Give me life, wake me up. I’ve lived in silence for so long. Just serenade me ...

I can't really agree with Love2act4ever... My qualm lied in the rhymes. Your rhythm was fairly consistent with a hiccup here and there. You see, your rhyme scheme lacked complete ...

Conceptually I applaud you. It's unique, organic, and refreshing to read something a bit more original. They way you constructed it I wasn't a fan of. It felt as if ...

I don't explain my work, as a writer that is not my job. I write for the self interpretation of my audience.

My Coffee Cup The dregs in my coffee cup Resemble something I lost Swirling into your face Leaving once I look Why do they go? On diff’rent lands do you ...

It's nice, but you really had some rhythm problems in there. The rhythm of the first stanza doesn't fit the second, particularly in the first and last lines. When reading ...

It's a beautiful love poem, but some of the rhymes weren't necessarily "true" rhymes. In the second and sixth stanzas, the words don't rhyme completely. Family, dearly? No. Again, mend? ...

Sonnet of a Failed Mother She gave birth to her child Oh loved him she did Her words were so mild Feelings were soon rid She lost her soft emotions ...

Finally a consistent rhyme scheme! ^_^ Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. I enjoyed it very much. As I said in the above statement, your rhyme scheme was consistent all the ...

I didn't particularly care for it. It just seems so unrefined to me. I found myself reading it quickly, like each line had little meaning. There were too many questions ...

Look over for spelling error(s), first off. It's a pretty poem, and I enjoyed reading it. It's more of a "feel good", "warm your heart" thing. You know? =3 If ...