Ringo_rules987

She Told Me I spoke with a girl in the years of my youth. She told me many things, some pleasant, some perplexing. She was kind but disturbed, and smiled ...

I like the way you started the poem with that first line. Your eyes don’t sparkle like a star, glistening in a night sky. Your smile doesn’t light up a ...

I cannot let any poem be left without a critique! Now about the poem: I see her twinkling lights across the dark wine sea; Istanbul, you’re so cool. "You're so ...

My Writing’s No Good My doubtful mind is a dry well. There is no fresh rain at all. The bank of ideas is spent, And all resources are lost. My ...

This was very, very good. I have trouble saying anything negative about. What I enjoyed in particular about it was the unique representation of something so common. Describing the sun's ...

*sighs*, I envy your skill and ability. The diversity was great without being a jumbled mess, which is a very difficult thing to accomplish. It's a very contemplative poem, and ...

Scarlet Knuckles It started with a chair That tied me to the Earth. One figure, one person Laughed as I screamed. I couldn’t once escape From my wooden prison. Two ...

Repetition, when used wisely and with subtlety, can tie a poem together and help rhythm in a great way, but the idea of using the same line for each stanza ...

Conceptually the poem is great, but you had a few things in there that threw me off a bit. The first stanza was fantastic, the rhyme weaved in nicely without ...

Over the Nights and Morns I saw the homeless woman always starving on the streets While twenty floors above her a greedy rich man drinks Now I wish that I ...

I don't call this a poem, and by no means am I saying it's not a poem because it is short. Emily Dickinson's "Fame is a Bee" was four lines ...

I really enjoyed reading this, the imagery is nice and to me its a very refreshing love poem. I particularly loved this line: Not an assemblage or words on a ...

This, to me, is a brilliant representation of the disappoints of failure and life in general. This is a topic that really can appeal to many people, so conceptually I ...

Okay let's do this: Most of us that live in the moment are lost, and it seems the only way to find yourself it to end it all, for nobody ...

You know I don't know if I can call this poetry, it literally reminded me of a prerequisite list for some sort of job. I like the concept, but immediately ...