Rigel

My heart has been ripped out, and the pitiful, tattered thing has been smeared across the walls of my soul. I think this is probably moving into the realm of ...

Your problem is that you want to have all of the background of an entire book in a short story. I'm sure that in a larger context many of these ...

i liked the riming and all If there is once place on earth where this is appropriate, it's here. It's "rhyming."

Two things: 1. I adore "Sentiments cease to make sense" 2. It was lovely.

Don't take this too seriously. On my yacht with all its bulk I find a spot To weep and sulk I am mad and morbid and unrewarded Not the first ...

Why is it that bored people always write really emo poems?

To me, the substance of this poem was not in the words. The words, to me, were all things I'd heard before to describe rape.

I liked the rhyme, mostly. It got stale in places. "Strife" and "Life" is a cliche, "love" and "spoken of" feels awkward, and it would be fantastic if you rhymed ...

I liked the title, but it seemed needlessly depressing to me.

Pretty neat. I'm a sucker for elegant character description, which you have, and you definitely took advantage of what you've given yourself. Exciting, too.

The beginning is a bit blunt, but yeah. The dialogue is nice. There's not a whole lot to review here, but it seems like a good something.

I do remember the night well when I saw a Burner on Chris Torzan’s methane clipper. It was clear out, as clear as it ever gets on Titan, in the ...

It isn't a complete sentence. And it is a term that is used. Hazmat suit. It's those big white things with tubes coming out of the neck that the police ...

And I could just look hazmat up in the dictionary except I am lazy and also mozilla spell check doesn't pick it up. Is it a word? . It's an ...

I wrote this because I wanted to write a poem with a descending number of syllables in each line that also made sense. =P Count Down Anticipation gradually grows; All ...