Rigel

If we gave you a plot, it would be our story, not yours.

This has no plot. It's a nice little scene, but it has no plot. I can accept this as an exercise in dialogue, but not as a play. The climax ...

I did not like this. Maybe I'm a philistine, but I just did not like this. I don't believe that it's a bad poem, but I did not enjoy reading ...

I liked it, there's just a bit of superfluous mumbo-jumbo towards the end. This would make a great play, actually.

It's a bit of a cliche idea. Describe the state that this boy has fallen into.

I liked it. Loved the story and all, and I'm pretty sure that it belongs on the poetry forum. I also understand what you're doing with the punctuation, but to ...

*sighs and takes out large EMO stamp* Unfortunately, this is just one tiny piece in a large, bleeding, crying pile of similar crap. I say, toss it. If you really ...

There were so many grammatical errors in this, I can't even list them all. Go over all your tenses. Kudos on rhyming, though. It was hard to read, but it's ...

Nice idea, very touching and I like the rhyme scheme, when you had it. I am a stickler for flow and scan, though, and this has neither. My advice is ...

There is nothing here. You have given us two hollow husks of characters and some heavy-handed exposition and you ask us to critique them. Generally speaking, you don't post a ...

EDIT IN RESPONSE TO THE POST BELOW: It doesn't change my opinion of the poem one bit if you wrote it when you were 11. If you wrote it upon ...

I wrote this for a show in my performing arts class. It had to be about mothers in some way, and I know it's a little repetitive. It isn't autobiographical ...

Thank you for the comment! Of course there's more. It was originally going to be a full-length novel. I would have put it in the fantasy literature section had I ...

I am writing an epic poem. I asked on the discussion forum and was told to put it here. I have no title yet, but I have the whole story. ...

The other day I was thinking about epic poems and why nobody writes them anymore. I thought for a while and, since I have an idea that has refused to ...