Rigel

I like the poem. What kind of poem is it? A free verse? How do you not know that it's free verse? Can you read? Besides that, I enjoyed it. ...

The poem was terrible, but I hope you feel better!

The sex scene at the end was funny, perhaps intentionally. If you don't want that to be funny then change it right now.

To me, it felt too raw. It wasn't poetic enough. It was powerful emotion, but it needed some seasoning, a sprig of rosemary, some chicken broth and a splash of ...

Crammed was the only word I could think that would fit and rhyme. Well it doesn't work, and it ruins the last stanza of an otherwise lovely poem. Nobody says ...

This was pretty bad, but I encourage you to write something about something else.

Ahhh, that was lovely. I'm usually super-technical about rhyming poems and super-cynical about free verse, but good free verse melts me. The beginning lasted a bit too long for my ...

I wrote this at a writing conference. I want to know if it made you giggle and if you have suggestions on the syllable scheme. Something in this syntax hates ...

oh why do they push me to the brink of life. already my time's elapsed and now i live with all this strife. i've gotta stay and waste away the ...

Ok, good effort. I love odd rhyme schemes. There were a few problems with this, however; the most prominent was that in many places you sacrificed meaning for a rhyme ...

I'll review this when you've spell-checked it.

This is a monologue or poem, not a script.

Not really a poem... just some thoughts. Nice thoughts, mind you, but it does not function at the level of poetry.

This is bad English. I'm not talking about the poem yet, you understand. I'm talking about your use of the English language. The light pitter-patter, Of the rain drumming on ...

I agree with everything smorgishborg said.