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Ok first of all why LOTUS? Because it's about a lotus :) lol but more in depth, it is about a lotus seed resting in the earth 'underneath layer upon ...

Lotus - Overwhelming stillness sleeps quietly underneath layer upon layer of darkness. A rustle of awareness slowly awakens it, providing support enough to ground itself in something so seemingly non-

The work is very raw and simple. I like it, but I feel that it could be dramatized a little. If this could be used as a frame to set ...

That is really beautiful; I would leave it just the way it is. You have developed a very strong voice and style. Good work.

I considered putting this in the Other Fiction forum, but I couldn't decide, so I put it here. Enjoy, and feel free to comment. Strength I was angry. Sad, too. ...

I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it had very good use of literary devices like metaphors, similies, imagery, etc. To read it was almost to dance yourself. Well done.:smt048

At the moment, I just started reading To Kill A Mockingbird for the second time (my favourite book of all time), and am about 1/3 of the way through Harry ...

It doesn't sound finished to me. It just seemed to cut short, when there was so much more you could have said to make it better. I've nothing against short ...

Yes, I certainly agree with Blue Haze. That was a truly powerful and moving piece. The emotions presented are very, very strong. Great job!

Light.

Overall I agree with the whole topic, and I did think it made sense. However, I don't understand why you used the word's 'real' and 'unreal'. What makes what you ...

WOW. Your imagery was so intense, it practically gave me shivers! You can almost feel the cold you describe; it was that precise. It gave an very haunting feeling. The ...

I just wanted to say how brilliant your rhythm and flow is! I read it out loud, and the words just slipped off my tongue. It flows so perfectly that ...

That was beautiful. Sheer, glorious... I don't know. Beauty. I loved it. Just one suggestion though. At the beginning, the piece seemed to flow, to rhyme in a very subtle ...

8/10. I have no idea what it means, but it sounds sort of latin.... It's good though, I like different languages!