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Thanks for the tips, CL, they are really helpful. I'll be sure to try and use them for my story I'm working on. 8)

I really like how this was written. I like how it all seems to build up to one climax, and I like your original descriptions of things. I’ve never felt ...

I actually don't use last names in my stories. In a short story especially, they are not completely necessary - it doesn't add any signifigant characterizarion. I've actually read some ...

Thank you all for replying. :D Bubblewrapped, I like your suggestions. They do seem to fit better. ibelieve_inme, I'm glad you liked it. Trident, no offense was taken. Your opinion ...

I liked this - it was interesting to read, and your language used is really good, too. Some suggestions: ...when all washes back to normalcy--that dull, ailing normalcy--the only true ...

Again, all thoughts and comments are appreciated. The middle section doesn't seem to be working that well, but I've no ideas on how to fix it. The food imagery is ...

Hey Myth, Thanks for reviewing my story; your suggestions all make more sense than what I had. Actually, my teacher is a huge procrastinator, and we still haven't gotten these ...

Hey fanatic_dadaism! Have fun here at YWS, and enjoy your stay! :D

Well, I liked your vocabulary you used. It was rather interesting to read. I'm not so sure about your line breaks. Right now, there's basically one sentence per line, and ...

"Love. No question." Sangha "I have no idea." Makata "Love - wouldn't that be an adventure? All I have is money, and it offers nothing to me." Camilla "Money - ...

He took a long drag from his cigarette, a glance down the empty hall, and passed the rest of it to me through the cell bars. When I first read ...

Part Three- This was as equally done as the other three parts (and all those parts were well done!). Your charaterization is especially brilliant in this part. I really got ...

This is very good quality writing. I like your imagery and metaphors - they're used efficiently and appropriately. It adds another dimension to what could be (in the hands of ...

Incandescence - [In response to number two] You've made some harsh critiques on my poetry before, and I might've been mad at you then, but I'm not anymore. Your critiques ...

*Is confused* :?: I didn't write this, I just critiqued it. :?