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This is so good! Oh my God! My only editing tip is that the line 'Clueless replies' did not seem to flow as well as the rest of the lyrics.

This is really good for being written at 3 AM :) All I have to edit is a know it all, could care less, chick with a chip on her ...

Other than a handful of spelling mistakes (which we all have, don't worry) I think this is an awsome beginning! :D

This is really good, but I think it could use a little more explanation: like why is the day ironic?

Wow.... I like it! But since you asked for harsh critiques, capitalize?

Thank you for the input, it is my first attempt at sci fi and I expected no less than a little general.

Predictable... or individual?

Do you know what the funny thing is? I knew this was you before I read the user name because that is so something you would say. :)

I liked the unconventional way of poetry, it is a cool way of leaving it an open ending. Maybe have more of an explanation throughout the middle of it? Food ...

I really enjoyed this chapter, it is eerie and very descriptive. But I believe that more dialog might spice it up a bit. :)

"Come on baby girl, come on over." This younger man had been following me through the hell hole of a city that had been named in old fashion: Survivor. Survivor ...

I found this poem truly remarkable. I love it! You have a marvelous gift.