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Re: Shakespeare Style
I just find it so ironic that now, of all times, I get a reply. I must remember to post controversial/snippy remarks all the time :wink: And yeah, I don't ...
Oct 6, 2006 -
Re: Shakespeare Style
Um, to be honest I'm not sure if either of those posts were helpful, though the first was obviously well-meant and I appreciate that. I mean, since I wrote the ...
Oct 6, 2006 -
Re: With the worn feeling of Monday
With the worn feeling of Monday I’m sitting here, crying my eyes out over my Father- the Impresario- and my Mother- the Manic Depressive. The crying is actually internal because ...
Oct 2, 2006 -
Re: No title
Rural landscape steams by; smoke sticks to the glass, Too quiet here for noise or fuss. Or shallow thought. Lawn laid out like a thousand picnic spreads, 'Cept now your ...
Sep 30, 2006 -
Re: Mistake
Let me start off with a couple of punctuation corrections. They acted happy around me, but that was just it; an act I think it's meant to be a colon ...
Sep 30, 2006 -
Re: Wings
The description is good and I'd like to read more. One thing: you might consider varying the sentences in the beginning. Sometimes too many sentences starting with "the" or "she" ...
Sep 30, 2006 -
Re: Sister of a Suicide
Flower heads fell, decapitated, into the dark green pool to sit crystalline on the surface, along her legs, through her hair. It was a dense muteness overpowering the clammy cold ...
Sep 30, 2006 -
Re: Shakespeare Style
The first line is borrowed from a Midsommer Night's Dream. Being in night, all this is but a dream, Too flattering-sweet to be substantial. Harsh dawn keeps distance enough to ...
Sep 28, 2006 -
Re: This will make much more sense if you've seen Blood Brothers
I wrote this while we were studying the play Blood Brothers in drama. Hopefully you'll get something of the story in what I've written. It's meant to be a character/plot ...
Sep 28, 2006 -
Re: Innocence
I'm not sure if it's what you were going for but I like the lack of punctuation as the poem continues. The lengthy sentence at the end that's broken up ...
Sep 28, 2006 -
Re: Welcome New Members!
Um, I don't really know what to do on here. By that I mean where to start. It's been at least 2 years since I was on boards (properly). Anyway, ...
Sep 27, 2006 -
Re: Best Friend
It doesn't take many words to express how you feel. Like a birthday card, The message is already printed. It's short but it means somebody cares. But I'm not good ...
Sep 26, 2006
