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Regretably, I don't have time to read this, but I do have one suggestion regarding your title. It needs to be easier to read. I know in fanatsy we like ...

I'm not so sure of how I feel about this one. Maybe that's why this would work better has a longer story. It would make the transition from sad/nostaligic to ...

The line about going part time did seem like she was going to work part time to me as well. That should probably have been more clear. It certainly is ...

I also thought there was no substance in this. What were you trying to get across with this poem? Since there was not much emotion in it, I was expecting ...

On a related note (which is strange for me as I usually sprout useless nonsense,) J.K Rowling was ordered by Bloomsberry to change from Joanne to J.K., for fear that ...

Personally, I didn't love Valentines Day even when I was in a relationship (which ended a few weeks ago). He was always more interested in doing something than I was. ...

Here here! Thanks Nate. Lets just read and enjoy!

It is pretty sad that a society that is supposed to be about freedom of speech can try to punish people for simply exercising that right. What is even sadder ...

There's another really logical reason for there only to be boys on the island. From what I understood, they were from a private boarding school. Especially when this was written, ...

I think that is a very good reason for keeping twins together when they adopt whenever possible. It reminds me of a time someone told me that my brother and ...

Why did you putlines through so much of it? That made reading it difficult. I know a few people put negative comments about the parts after the diary entry, but ...

That is a huge scholarship. College in America is amazingly expensive, though, so I'm not surprized. (my entire student loan debt is less that $20 000 and that's for two ...

I really don't know what to think. Some of it is funny. Some of it makes perfect sense. Then other times it is horribly offensive, especially when you touch on ...

What would cure world hunger would be decent irrigation in African countries so that they could grow better crops in the driest areas, better economies so that everyone can afford ...

This strikes me as something that would work better written as a personal essay instead of with action and dialogue, particularly with the way you opened the story, telling us ...