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It's okay start. I don't want to say anything that has already been said, so here's my suggestion. Tell us what Tinloseph looks like. You say that he's a toll, ...

Mind saying that in simple English? I wish you guys would be this interested in my work. from now on, I think I'll just stay away from this topic.

Once again, good work in the italics, though I'm not sure how it's relavent to the rest of the story. I guess that will become clear later. As for the ...

Woah, woah, woah. This is going way to far. It's gone from a fun discussion to a way-to-serious debate. Let me make a few things clear. Nobody taught me to ...

It's pretty arrogant to assume that just because we have a greater understanding of certain sciences that anient wisdoms must be wrong. Take Chinese medicine for example. It works just ...

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Well, I find it hard to believe that people take the bible as literally as they do. But I don't make fun of those beliefs, and only ever critisize it ...

Actually, the fact that they are real people could be the problem. You know yourself and the other people so well that you don't realize you're not including enough details.

I don't understand why you keep coming to this topic, especially with that attitude. I would appriciate it if you either didn't come here, or let yourself believe in magic ...

Fascinating topic. I am so on your side with this one. Great work.

Youd pace. Okay narrative and diction. The flow was a little choppy, but could be fixed easily with some minor revisions. However, it seemed very superficial, and I didn't get ...

yes. It does show promise for a beginner. However, I think the word cliche has become a cliche. I wish people would stop worry about being so new and fresh ...

That's an okay idea, but shouldn't someone write an opening and put it int the storybook section?

Not bad. But shouldn't this be in the nonfiction section?

How is it off topic? That's some funless attitude you seem to have for this topic. People are talking about the Fair Folk, even if they are being a bit ...